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Submitted by Alexandria (May 18, 2009)

I don't know if I sent you the wrong comment or what, but here it goes: First off, having the story be a continual dialogue is rare, and for me it was a nice change. Be sure to have your punctuation correct though: each paragraph should have " at the beginning, but not at the end because it is all the same person speaking the entire narrative. I do not play cards, so I couldn't tell you if you did anything wrong: quite frankly, it was a little hard to follow, but the feeling of unease was there. I'm confused though if Sue is male or female because you switched the he/she every paragraph or so. Overall: I like your interpretation of "hole" compared to the other competitors: good luck!